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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Ohter argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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it is true
people
 can see the problems in different ways, how is it written, some
people
 believe that it is best to accept a bad situation
also
 other argue
that is
 better try and improve in those situations.
personally
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daily life we can be those of the two types of
people
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 example,
People
 who start training, to be clear, those who start jogging there are some who train to achieve a single goal
such
 as running ten
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 but there are others who want to improve themselves, they always seek to improve and do more than ten
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, Another example is at school
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 when a student does well in the subject and gets a basic grade and is satisfied with that because he knows that he is going to pass the subject, but in another
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 if he wanted to be better he would still strive and would not settle with the grade
therefore
 I believe that
people
 settle for a bad job or with
shortage
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 of money because they do not want to leave their comfort zone for fear of failure and the feeling that they
couldnt
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couldn't
 get the best as a better job, a place where they earn more money to conclude
people
 have to take risks to get better things and to have a good life.So I think it depends on the problem, how we look at it and how we look for solutions, not always the decisions we make will come out with a negative result and we should not stress It's time to act fast and be confident that everything will go well.
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