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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an  satisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Situations in
life
 vary from individual to individual.
However
, when it comes to the worst times of
life
,some people opine that it is better to accept it as the way it is.While
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 others are of the opinion that efforts need to be made to ameliorate it.In
this
 essay, I shall discuss both sides and give my opinion.
To begin
 with, being in a bad situation and not trying to overcome it will lead to low quality of
life
,in terms of personal as well as professional aspects.
For instance
, people who are obliged to work in poor working conditions have proven to live a depressed
life
 even if they have adjusted to their current condition.
Furthermore
, a low income or unsatisfactory job will definitely create  issues in personal
life
such
 as short-temper,depression,anxiety,stress and an attitude to give up every time something bad happens.
On the other hand
, a person who has strong perseverance to challenge all the obstacles in his path will have a feeling of self-satisfaction even if he fails.
For example
, during the beginning of my career as a nurse, I had really struggled to adjust to the shift timing and arrogant behaviour of superiors.But, by the time being, I trained myself to Cop up with different schedules and tried to maintain a rapport with my superiors.
As a result
, after 6 months from the time of joining, I started to find myself in a more comfortable space. In my opinion continued effort and determination in a bad situation is necessary to have a better tomorrow.
Otherwise
, in the
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life
 will have only failures to offer. To sum up, I reiterate that, accepting the negative aspects of
life
 will have detrimental effects throughout and an attitude to overcome anything and everything  which is satisfactory helps in
further
 individual growth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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