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To improve the quality of education, some people think that we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Other believe that this will result in loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Teachers
 are
second
 parents and education is a foundation created by
teachers
. Some people believe that to get more attention to improve study is to evaluate the teacher's capacity but I think
this
 is not a good idea to criticise educator.
First
 of all,
teachers
 are our mentors who guide us in every path of life whether it's is educational or ethical so it is not good against supervisors.
Moreover
,
teachers
 always try to do their best to improve and polish all of their pupils
consequently
 if in the whole world if someone achieved something it's a great part of teaching so it will be disrespectful if faculty member comes in questions. Apart from
this
,
teachers
 are authorised to teach
students
 whatever syllabus set by university colleges or schools
as a result
 they are not the ones who will improve quality.
On the other hand
, few people argue that sometimes
students
 got involved in some kind of unnecessary activities which lead them out of track so ,in
this
 ,case lecturer should be careful if
students
 are not improving in studies so if
teachers
 will have kind of fear that if performance level of any student will go down
then
 blame will come on them.
Furthermore
,
teachers
 are mainly responsible for the evaluation of
students
 in the study graph if
students
 are not involving seriously
then
 faculties need to inform guardians. Overall it can be observed that graduates are more responsible for their education so
teachers
 should not be criticised and evaluate for anything related to improving the quality of education.
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