Crime is becoming a serious concern. Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime. While others feel that little action can be done to stop crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Increasing criminal incidents are becoming
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reason to worry. One section of people
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that the
punishment
can be
further
made hard to prevent the unlawful act from
occuring
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occurring
. Whereas, others are of the opinion that it will not be of any use to stop the crime from increasing, as it is a mindset and circumstances which leads to increase in the bad doings and very little can be done to improve in
this
area. I
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with some relevant examples.
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,
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of the public think that if the strict laws are implemented and harder actions are taken against bad people who are involved in extreme offences like sexual assaults, murders
then
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giving them hard
punishment
like death sentence would set a right example in society so that person with think twice before attempting
such
acts. The fear factor
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this
case will help reduce the number of
such
cases.
For instance
, a study was done recently on various countries where we have capital
punishment
for
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offences versus countries where
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there
is no
such
punishment
is there. And it was found that
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where there is capital
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punishment
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in place,
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have gone down from the time it was implemented. have got
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opinion about
this
. They think that offenders are not born as they are.
Situation
and mindset developed over time
leads
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to being involved in the bad acts.
Hence
when they are in the process of attempting
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unlawful act, they are actually are not afraid of being caught or about
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punishment
they may get. So, very little can be done to ensure we have control over everybody's
situation
or the thought process. There was a survey done on
this
when
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of prisoners across the nation was asked about whether they were aware or thought about
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of their
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wrong doings
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.
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of them said they just got carried away by the
situation
and was not even remotely thinking about the price they will have to pay. In conclusion, while I take both
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views into account, I am a firm believer
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implementing strict laws and spreading awareness about possible lawful
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certain common illegal
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can bring to
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peoples life. And
also
improving on the ground
situation
by working toward prosperity is the key
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overall
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the overall
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well being of society to reduce unfortunate incidents like crime.
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