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Some universities now offer their courses on internet so people can study online.Is this a positive or negative development?

#universities #offer #courses #internet #people #study #development
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In recent times, virtual
education
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 has been adopted by some tertiary institutions to promote online
studies
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.In my opinion,
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 is due to advancement in technology and it should be a positive development
to
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 both
students
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 and teachers because it reduces the workload.
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 of all, people rely on machines because of the latest developments in machine learning.
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 is because a lot of data and facts
available
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 via the internet meaning
students
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 are able to connect with their teachers
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easily
at
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in
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 the comfort of their prefered places.
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,
education
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 materials can be shared easily at the same time
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 many
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.
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, online
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 have reduced the enormous manual workload that
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 being done.
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, virtual learning has enabled minimal contact of individuals
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 reducing the spread of infectious diseases.
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 ,a recent study carried by Kenyatta University found that 80% of
students
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 prefer online
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 compared to face to face.
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,virtual classes has an upper hand.
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, online
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 is expensive in terms of buying data bundles being a thorn in
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 flesh for
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 because they do not have
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 source of income.
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,poor internet connectivity poses a challenge
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 online
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 to communicate effectively.
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 no network coverage in
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the North
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 Eastern part of Kenya.
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,a disadvantage on virtual
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 creating a weak point to lower
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moral
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. To conclude, improved technology has
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 efficient
studies
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 online owing to the fact that
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 is increased innovation and
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 has developed great impact change on modern learning.
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, reducing the routine toil of mankind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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