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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What are the main causes and what measures could be taken to solve these problems?

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In some countries, the average
weight
 of
people
 is increasing and levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What are the main causes and what measures could be taken to solve these problems? In several nations, the average mass of humans is raising and healthiness and wellness are diminishing. In my opinion, there have two main reasons
such
 as lifestyle and fast food eating habits.
This
 essay will consider the main causes of
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rise
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 in obesity, before proposing two possible solutions.
First
 and foremost, the most important cause of increasing
weight
 of
people
 in a fast-paced world.Because the advent of the internet and technology has
to
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change our life so much.
Therefore
people
 need to be active every possible hour to not left behind the information .
As a
result
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people
 go on fast food which has rich fat
cybohydrate
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carbohydrate
carbohydrates
, rather than cooking food.
Secondly
, jobs are becoming desk-bound and limited
physicall
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physical
 activity.
However
, there are two promising solutions to
this
 problem.
First
 of all,
goverment
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government
healt
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health
 care should
pay
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 give small attention to prevent gaining
weight
.
For
example
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 give voucher or appeal
who
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 attends
fittness
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fitness
 or yoga class.
This
 would more
attracte
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attractive
attracted
people
 in
exersice
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exercise
 and
eventually
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 average
people
weight
 will decrease.
Secondly
,
people
 need to know
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today
todays
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today's
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 healthy dishes are actually fast as
fastfoods
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fast foods
.If
human
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humans
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 consume
well balanced
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well-balanced
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nutrions
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nutrition
nutrients
 they will lose
weight
 and stay fit even they
dont
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don't
exersice
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exercise
 often. In conclusion,21 century
Weight
 is
major
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 problem in many
state
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states
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 because of
fast paced
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fast-paced
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 world.
Although
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the
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govermant
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government
governments
 and
people
needs
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need
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 to pay attention to
weight
 and lifestyle
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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