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The table graph presents information about types of families in Australia, who were poor, and the
number
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 of
people
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 for each family, in 1999. Overall, it is noticeable that the most
proportion
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 of
poverty
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 was sole parent, while an aged
couple
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 had just a percentage of the poor at the lowest.
To begin
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 with, the
number
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 of the aged couples was about 50 thousand, which had the least percentages at 4%, and there was the
proportion
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 for couples without
children
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, 19%, which the
number
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 of them had 4 times more than an aged
couple
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. Apart from, the most
proportion
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 of
this
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couple
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poverty
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 group is
couple
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 with
children
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, 12% which the figures for its
people
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 had over 4 times more than a
couple
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 without
children
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. On the other group, 6% of single aged person was
poverty
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, which had a
number
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 of
people
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 at around 55 thousand, whereas, single without
children
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 and sole parent was the highest
proportion
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 of categories at 19% and 21% respectively.
Similarly
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, the
number
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 of sole parents and couples without
children
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 were closely
number
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, but the
proportion
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 of sole parents had 3 times more than a
couple
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 without
children
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. Eventually, All
poverty
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 households were 11% and the figure for
people
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 had approximately 2 million.
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