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Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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These days, watching movies has become a popular choice that many of us would go for.
However
, some people still believe that even though reading
fiction
 is an old fashioned way, but it means a lot to them. In the following paragraphs, it will include why
fiction
 books have more advantages than watching movies. To start off with, there is the main reason why individuals choose to read
fiction
. As you read
fiction
 books, you have a deeper understanding of the plot and what the writer is trying to express. That means, there is more freedom for the readers to imagine and have their own understanding. By knowing more about how the writer is trying to convey or symbolise.
For instance
, describing a
bird
 stuck in
the
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 tiny cage might represent how hopeless and helpless the
bird
 is. As the cage has a mini size, the
bird
 could not do many large movements, and it could not fly again. It might represent a person that has a pessimistic mindset and feel like a
cage
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bird
 or it might symbolize a group of people that are not treated by others, which makes readers sympathize with them.
As a result
, I personally agree reading
fiction
 is more advantageous, as there is a wider space for readers to think and have their own, unique understanding. Visual effects only make your mind become idle and passive, if you would like to understand it in a more vivid way, I would describe watching movies as like having fast food, you just enjoy the moment, but soon, those effects will vanish from your mind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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