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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for Each crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and motivation committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The number of criminals has increased immensely around the globe during the past few decades.There are different types of punishments
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 have been mentioned in law
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books
 according to the
crime
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.Some people contend that criminals should always be subject to fixed punishment for each
crime
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.
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, others argue that circumstances, motivation factors and intentions should be considered
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account while deciding their fate.I believe that
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 should not only
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seriousness
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the seriousness
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 of the wrongdoing. On the one hand, if there is a fixed punishment for every
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, all persons who committed murder will have the same sentences.
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 people will be more conscious to be law-abiding citizens because they would already know their fate.
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, If someone committed a murder, he or she is imposed to death
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 or imprisonment until the end of
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 life.Many individuals consider
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policy
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 would decrease the number of criminal offences.
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, fixed sentences do not always serve
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justice
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,
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of
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 someone
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 killed due to
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a road
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 traffic accident unintentionally, punishing the culprit as a
murder
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 who killed a person would not meet the relevant criteria of
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, it is
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 unfair to give juveniles the same punishments because it would have
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 impact on their entire lives.They May have engaged in illegal activities because of
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 temper.In fact, they have poor legal literacy.
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, caring circumstances could be a chance to wrong-doers who do it repeatedly to escape from
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justice
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. In conclusion, people have controversial views of sentences and legal procedures should be assessed not only by exploring the severity of the
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,
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 but
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 the circumstances and other reasonable factors
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that should
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 be taken into account before initiating the law.
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, equality of the law would diminish.
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