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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large company can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The given pie chart shows that the
proportition
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proportion
 of causes that give rise to the decline of arable
land
 all over the world. The
second
 bar chart gives the details about diminished
land
 caused by
deforestation
, over-cultivation and over-grazing, in three main regions
duiring
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during
 the 1990s. Overall ,it is clear that over-grazing contributed most to the decrease of worldwide
land
. In the three regions, the damaged situations were totally different, Europe lost
most
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 useful
land
. Over-grazing shows a significant effect on
land
 degradation, 35% of which resulted
by
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 over-gazing.
Deforestation
also
 plays an important role
on
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this
 environmental problem and decreases by 30% of the total
land
 .
Furthermore
, Over-cultivation accounts for 28% of
land
 degradation and other reasons account for 7%. In Europe, productive
land
 decreased most up to 23% and
deforestation
 was the main cause which contributed to 9.8%.
On the contrary
, only 0.2% and 1.7
%
of
land
was
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 affected by
deforestation
 in North America and Oceania, respectively. Remarkably,
although
 Oceania
have
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 lost 13%
arable
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of arable
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land
, over-grazing almost had no influence on its
land
.
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