Some people believe that schools are no longer necessary, because students can get so much information through the Internet, and study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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INTERNET IS BECOMING POPULAR FOR ACQUIRING THE KNOWLEDGE.

HOWEVER

, IT IS BELIEVED BY SOME PEOPLE SCHOOLS ARE DO NOT IMPORTANT IN FUTURE. CHILDREN CAN BE MUSHROOMED THEIR INFORMATION BY USING

INTERNET

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THE INTERNET

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. THEY DO NOT NEED TO GO

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TO SCHOOLS

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SCHOOLS

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SCHOOL

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. WHILE I

DIAGREE

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DISAGREE

WITH

THIS

OPINION AND

THIS

ESSAY WILL BE EXPLAINED MY VIEWPOINTS IN

FOLLOWING

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PARAGRAPHS. TO COMMENCE WITH, THERE ARE A PLETHORA OF REASONS WHY INTERNET LEARNING IS NOT WORTHWHILE FOR JUVENILES. THEY CAN GET

DISTRACT

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VERY EASILY WHILE STUDYING. OWING TO, DIFFERENT TYPES OF ADS WHICH ATTRACT TO THEM.

AS A RESULT

, THEY WILL NOT GET THE OUTCOMES

WHICH

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THEY WANT. IN AMERICA MOST OF THE TEENAGERS DID NOT

PASSED

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THE TEST WHEN THEY

STUDY

ONLINE DURING THE COVID 19 PERIOD.

THEREFORE

, IF STUDENTS DO NOT PAY

CONCENTRATION

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STUDY

THAN

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THEN

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THEY WILL NOT GET SUCCESS IN THEIR LIFE.

FUTHERMORE

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FURTHERMORE

, MORE

STUDY

METERIALS

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MATERIALS

CAN GET

CONFUSE

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CONFUSED

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TO STUDENTS BECAUSE WHEN THEY HAVE PLENTY OF VIDEOS RELATED TO ONE TOPIC

THAN

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THEY DO NOT GET CLEAR THEIR

DOUTS

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DOUBTS

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. AS A CONSEQUENCE,THEY WILL NOT

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BE EXPERT

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EXPERT

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EXPERTS

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IN THEIR FIELD.

HENCE

, IF

YOUNGONES

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YOUNG ONES

STUDY

UNDER THE

GUIDENCE

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GUIDANCE

OF TEACHERS

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THEY WILL IMPROVE THEIR WEEK POINTS. "THE LIFE" IS A IT COMPANY WHICH HIERS ONLY THOSE WORKERS WHO COMPLETED THEIR

STUDY

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WITH EITHER COLLEGES OR

UNIVERISITES

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UNIVERSITIES

. TO CONCLUDE,DOING

STUDY

IN COLLEGE DO NOT ASSIST ONLY TO BECOME EXPERT BUT

ALSO

IT CLEARS ALL

DOUTHS

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DEATHS

DOUBTS

YOUTHS

THAT ARE RELATED TO

STUDY

. ONLINE LEARNING IS

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A WAST

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WAST

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OF TIME DUE TO DIFFERENT

DISTRACETION

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DISTRACTION

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SUCH

ADVERTIESMENTS

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1Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

253 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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