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the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.

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 the statistic for the 1994 year was better than the 1995 year. More people travelled for holiday in 1998, the least number was shown for other reasons and most the going place was Westem Europ and the least amount happened in North America, meanwhile other areas were closer to North America.
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, the travel increased for business, visits to friends and relatives, a holiday from 1994 to 1998 sharply, the pointer of other reasons fluctuated and the least number belonged to other reasons in 1995 with 896, in ,contrast the maximum amount was appreciated in 1998 with 20700 for holiday. Both the statistics of 1994 and 1995 and the indexes of 1997 and 1998 years were relatively similar in North America.
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