A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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world
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people
are judged by their status and possession and the
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people
thinks
honest
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,
kindness
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and trust in important things. I do not agree with judging
person’s
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worth by these trends. Social status and possession
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one of the main problems of a disparity society. It is showing
a
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difference between rich
people
and poor
people
. Rich
people
have lots of money because they kick other
people
off to keep their high possessions. They all
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by the outside of themselves so when something happens it is easy to break.
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some
people
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they want to stay with
honest
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and kind person
,
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because they would not lie or betray.
However
, the person who likes to compare with others will easily betray.
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days, richer
people
has
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increased speedily. Many
people
thinks
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that they want to be famous and rich, the reason
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this
is because
people
want respect from
people
. So they neglect other ones and they want to show their goods things, but
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people
do not like these
people
.
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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Materialism
  • Social status
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honor
  • Kindness
  • Integrity
  • Consumerism
  • Superficiality
  • Ephemeral
  • Philanthropy
  • Prosperity
  • Altruism
  • Narcissism
  • Humility
  • Empathy
  • Ethics
  • Moral compass
  • Minimalist
  • Contentment
  • Material possessions
  • Status symbol
  • Wealth disparity
  • Moral bankruptcy
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