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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing about a training course titled 'Digital Presence for Global Expansion of Business', that was advertised in a daily newspaper on 14th October. I believe it would be helpful for me and I am hoping to get your permission to participate in it. In relation to the specifics of the training, it’s a four-day intensive session for Brand Managers and will be held from 20th to 23rd November. Registration (materials and meals included) fee is $200 and needs prior booking. Some renowned speakers would conduct the training at the BlueText Seminar Hall and more than 100 Brand Managers from different national and multinational companies are expected to participate in it. Since
this
 is a resourceful training session and would be helpful for us to expand our presence to a wider variety of digital channels, I am hoping you would exempt me from my duties for that time and consider reimbursing me for
this
 seminar. I will get back to my normal work from 24th November. It’s quite important to take advantage of
this
 opportunity because expanding our digital footprint and social presence for building comprehensive user engagement is the key goal for me
this
 year.
This
 seminar promises to make the participants ready for
this
 challenge. After successful completion of the training, I would be able to put together actionable steps that I can take immediately to start engaging more seriously with our users. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, William Brockie
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