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Art classes, like painting and drawing, are not as important as other subjects, so some people think that it should not be a compulsory subject at high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some people are of the opinion that it is necessary to make
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 a compulsory subject owing to the positive influence on the development of high school
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. From my perspective, I believe that
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 teenagers can receive benefits from
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, we should not force every student to anticipate those
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. Admittedly,
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 play a significant role in the development of juveniles.
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, artistic activities foster the creativity and imagination of
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, which is of great importance to their future jobs as all kinds of
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 require the ability to innovate to keep up with the rapidly changing trends and fashion.
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,
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 help
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 to foster hobbies and provide them with the opportunity to make friends with those who share the same hobby.
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, there will be great improvements in the communication and social skills of teenagers, which means they are more likely to work efficiently with co-workers in future workplaces.
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 do not necessarily need to be compulsory. Some
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 may hope to work in some fields with little connection to
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 as engineering or programming, so they have neither interest nor motivation to study
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.In
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 become a waste of time and money as the
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 bring little help to improve the career prospects of these
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,forcing every teenager to attend
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 adds a burden on
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.Being already stressful enough when facing other subjects
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 may find the study scheme is beyond their capabilities and the efficiency of learning other subjects is reduced. To summarize, there is no denying that the lives of
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 can be different without
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 as the
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 cultivate certain practical skills, but it should be the student's choice when it comes to whether to sign up for
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 or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive Development
  • Cultural Awareness
  • Emotional Expression
  • Career Opportunities
  • Holistic Education
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Critical thinking
  • Intellectual development
  • Emotional development
  • Diverse cultures
  • Historical contexts
  • Graphic design
  • Architecture
  • Animation
  • Digital age
  • Well-rounded education
  • Multiple intelligences theory
  • Individual Differences
  • Engagement
  • Motivation
  • Attendance
  • Stress expression
  • Healthy way
  • Relevant career paths
  • Art curriculum
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