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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Two argumentation is an encounter for a main environmental problem. Some people are concerned most about the extinction of particular
species
 of
plants
 and
animals
, and
the
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other
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 argue that there is
more
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 important environmental problem than
this
. Both argumentations have their
defenses
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. Losing a specific
species
 of
plants
 or
animals
 can be harmful and disadvantageous for living organisms, including human beings. They are precious creatures for the earth and could give the balance for the earthling. If they are extinct, we would get a disadvantage for could not observe, and the habitual balance would be disturbed.
Therefore
, it is crucial to protect the
species
, especially the extinct ones. From another perspective, there is a more vital issue to be addressed
first
,
such
 as air pollution and global warming. These
issues
 are very important because it affects most people's livelihood and
also
plants
 and
animals
 worldly. The comfortability and continuity of our lives would depend on these factors. If there are terrible air pollution and global warming, the victim of
this
 case would be enormous. In my opinion, the problem of losing particular
species
 of
plants
 and
animals
 is important because we should treat and protect the
animals
 and
plants
 and not cause damage to them.
Nevertheless
, we
also
 have to be concerned about other environmental problems, especially air pollution and global warming, caused by humans.
Therefore
, all
issues
 should be addressed and not avoid other
issues
 because we think that the
issues
 are essential than others, because all of these have a terrible impact on our lives and the lives in the world.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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