Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life bring more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, it is believed that
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time of
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is being teenagers
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some
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think that when
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get older and have a lot of duties, they can enjoy their life as well. Even though I totally
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disagree
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statement, I believe that there are certain reasons for support both sides, which will be discussed in the following essay. On the one hand,
happiness
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in teenagers is easier to have.
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, being in schools with friends will bring
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considerable
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because
children
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are able to have much time to enjoy playing and doing the activities
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as sports and book clubs with both old and new companies.
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,
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start learning their social and communication skills from schools
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they would share their stories and study subjects with friends which should improve stronger relationships. Apart
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, some parents take care
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unconditionally
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their
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,
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, purchasing toys and sweets.
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leads to boost up happy
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to
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children
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.
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, adults can have their own way to be happy despite having
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of
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responsibilities
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and significant view is lovely and warm families. Older
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may have some stress not only from workplaces but
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a load of payments and dept but after they work hard throughout the days, relax period would be families time including being with pets.
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,
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referring
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my experience welcoming new birth babies in
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is the best moment ever in my life as
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adult. In conclusion,
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nevertheless
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older
people
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can enjoy their life with families and pets, I have
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belief about younger having the greatest moments of
happiness
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because
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and students have
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responsibilities than adults who have more stress and problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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