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To what extent has the Internet made life more convenient?

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The
internet
 has profound contributions to our lifestyle and daily needs. For
people
, living in our era it is impossible to imagine life without social networks, global search and
entertainments
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entertainment
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 that are available 24 hours per day and 7 days per week.
This
 essay will discuss how the
Internet
 now plays
integral
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an integral
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 role in our lives,
firstly
, in terms of
educational
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the educational
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 process and,
secondly
, due to online communication opportunities.
First
 of all, the
Internet
 boosts
student
 autonomy and independence. It means that nowadays the
student
 is not only a participant
of
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 the process of learning but he is
also
 a creator of his education trajectory.
For example
, if he is highly interested
in
particular
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 topic or just the whole discipline, he will always have the opportunity to enhance and deepen his knowledge using the global search or some topical YouTube channels.
Moreover
, there can be a situation when the
student
 lags behind peers in Physics,
for instance
, and in
this
case
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 it would not be a great problem for him to find extra materials
in
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 the
Internet
 which explain the topic in a more clear way, than his school teacher.
Secondly
, the
Internet
 provides an unlimited opportunity to expand your social circle and enhance your network. In recent times social networking was strongly restricted by the conditions in which a person was born, by their origin and social class. Even though now all
this
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 restrictions still have their influence, it became simpler to find
people
 close in spirit not from the inner circle.
Furthermore
, the Global Web
he
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provided the opportunity to communicate with
people
 not only from your own country
,
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 but
also
 from abroad.
Such
 communication involves the exchange of experience, culture and traditions, which not only enriches a particular individual
,
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 but
also
 increases the level of solidarity in society. In conclusion, the
Internet
 brings numerous the benefits to education,
such
 as
student
 autonomy, and to online communication. Overall, the
internet
’s positive usage by
people
 all over the world significantly enriches our lives.
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