People should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside.to what extend do you agree or disagree?

It will add value to the community who reside in the
cities
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rather than outskirts or in the countryside. I agree with
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statement that there is a lot of opportunity in the
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for those who decide to live there.
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, there is an offer of greater employment possibility and higher standard of living in the
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, as
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is where most
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and government facilities are located
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many job opportunities.
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, there is better medical attention because of better medical infrastructure as well as
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the availability
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of
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in
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this
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facilities. Indeed there is better access to education facilities since big learning
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are
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in the
city
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and
latest
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technologies because of internet connection.
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research done by the Nairobi university shows that 95% of
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graduates
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would prefer to live in the
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after graduating.
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, there is greater and competitive employment and
high
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a high
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standard of living.
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, life in the
cities
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is crowded
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therefor
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it can be a bit stressful.
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addition
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there is pollution and often quite noisy.
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is overwhelming for
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dwellers as many people will not be able to rent big houses because they are expensive and
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there is overcrowding in small houses.
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example
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research
done
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by a master student in Nairobi university
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70% of retirees would prefer to live in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
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life in the
city
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is expensive and crowded. In conclusion, the community that lives in the
city
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has
greater
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opportunity
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opportunities
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and become for efficient in their daily activities due to better infrastructure and education
opportunity
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opportunities
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in the
cities
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. Perhaps it is more enjoyable to live in the
city
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than
is
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in
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suburbs
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the suburbs
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.

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