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In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do yo agree with either of these views?

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When it comes to educating youngsters, in some parts of the world people believe that children should start their education at the
age
 of 4, but in other
countries
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 the
age
 of starting educational studies is at 7 or 8 years old. I
am completely agree
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 with the
second
 view. Starting
school
 at the
age
 of 4 is not a suitable circumstance.
Firstly
, it
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it
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 because a child at
this
age
 is too small to be completely disciplined by the educational system, which is necessary.
Secondly
, infants still need to develop their basic skills,
such
 as proper speaking abilities.
For example
, my nephew, who is 4.5 years old, is a late
bloommer
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bloomer
bloomers
 and going into formal educational set-up
this
 early can cause him stress.
Finally
,
this
 is still the time of playing and having fun for kids of
age
 4 and forcing them to go to
school
 can have a
distructable
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destructible
distractable
 effect on them.
On the other hand
, I believe the acceptable
age
 for
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going
 to
school
 is when youths are 7 or 8. By that time, they are fully grown and ready for the
next
 level of schooling.
In other words
, the knowledge of a
proffessional
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professional
 teacher is crucial to their needs by the time they are 8.
Moreover
, more mature children are ready and need to leave home to be with
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people other than their family.
In addition
, when they grow to the primary
school
 years they are ready to develop more
advance
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 social skills. In
conclussion
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conclusion
,
although
 small kids need to learn and be educated,
but
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the official learning progress is better to get postpone until children are more mature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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