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Many parents give their children certain chores or tasks to do at home. Should children have to do chores or tasks at home? Be sure to explain why you think it is a good idea or a bad idea. Include examples to support your reasons.

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Some
parents
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 argue that
children
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 should do
chores
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 while others think that
children
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 disagree with
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kid
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kids
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 should enjoy
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 childhood. I believe that giving
children
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 tasks to do at home has advantageous.
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, by giving
children
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chores
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parents
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 teach them life skills.
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 skills as cooking, cleaning or laundry are essential in everyday life and assigning regularly
chores
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 would prepare them
to
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 future life when kids
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 grow up.
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, simply making the bed or washing dishes after eating would help
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child
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the child
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 become self-reliant and less dependent on
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.
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, like any work, housework teaches the
child
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 responsibility. By assigning
children
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 task, adults show that they
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 them and rely on them,
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 they feel encouraged, which directly increase their self-esteem.
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, it must be said that, in some cases, it is best to refrain from assigning certain
chores
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 to
children
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.
Parents
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 must understand that they should not impose too many responsibilities on their kids.
Children
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 have a lot of homework, and some of them go to sports clubs,
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 active sports as football or basketball are very exhausting for
children
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 and assigning
chores
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 after
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 training might be overwhelming for a fragile body.
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, it is important that the
child
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 remains a
child
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,
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otherwise
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 may be reflected in the future, an inner
child
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 who has not played enough can reveal himself in adulthood. Overall, it appears that giving
children
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chores
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 in moderate
amount
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 has considerable
advantageous
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 in kids
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upbringing
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up bringing
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upbringing
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.
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 contributes to that the
child
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 will grow up responsible and self-sufficient, which will certainly benefit him in the future.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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