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Many parents give their children certain chores or tasks to do at home. Should children have to do chores or tasks at home? Be sure to explain why you think it is a good idea or a bad idea. Include examples to support your reasons.

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Some
parents
 argue that
children
 should do
chores
 while others think that
children
 disagree with
this
 point counting that
kid
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kids
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 should enjoy
the
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their
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 childhood. I believe that giving
children
 tasks to do at home has advantageous.
Firstly
, by giving
children
chores
parents
 teach them life skills.
Such
 skills as cooking, cleaning or laundry are essential in everyday life and assigning regularly
chores
 would prepare them
to
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for
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 future life when kids
finally
 grow up.
For example
, simply making the bed or washing dishes after eating would help
child
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the child
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 become self-reliant and less dependent on
parents
.
Secondly
, like any work, housework teaches the
child
 responsibility. By assigning
children
 task, adults show that they
are trust
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 them and rely on them,
therefore
 they feel encouraged, which directly increase their self-esteem.
However
, it must be said that, in some cases, it is best to refrain from assigning certain
chores
 to
children
.
Parents
 must understand that they should not impose too many responsibilities on their kids.
Children
 have a lot of homework, and some of them go to sports clubs,
such
 active sports as football or basketball are very exhausting for
children
 and assigning
chores
 after
such
 training might be overwhelming for a fragile body.
In addition
, it is important that the
child
 remains a
child
,
otherwise
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this
 may be reflected in the future, an inner
child
 who has not played enough can reveal himself in adulthood. Overall, it appears that giving
children
chores
 in moderate
amount
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amounts
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 has considerable
advantageous
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advantages
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 in kids
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upbringing
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up bringing
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upbringing
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.
This
 contributes to that the
child
 will grow up responsible and self-sufficient, which will certainly benefit him in the future.
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