the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

The table gives some data about the selling at a small restaurant in a business area. As well,
this
table illustrates the date from October 7 to 13 and the statistic of
lunch
and dinner. Overall, the pointer of dinner was better than the index of
lunch
. The least amount of all occurred on
Sunday
,
in
contrast
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most of all happened on
Friday
.
Firstly
, the least number belonged on
Sunday
with 1550
dollars
,
in
addition
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the indexes of Tuesday and Wednesday were relatively similar the pointer of Thursday,
nevertheless
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the high rate belonged to Tuesday and Wednesday with 3850
dollars
. Generally, the maximum show was appreciated on
Friday
with 4350
dollars
.
On the other hand
, the shows dropping from 4350
dollars
to 2450
dollars
(between)from
Friday
to
Sunday
. What is more, the minimum show of the dinner belonged to
Sunday
with 2450
dollars
.
In addition
, the statistics of the
lunch
on Monday, Tuesday and
Friday
were relatively similar. The maximum number of the
lunch
belonged to Wednesday with 2595.
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