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Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not poor alternatives to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and/or against keeping animals in zoos.

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Some people believe that
zoos
 are necessary, arguing that
zoos
 play not only an educational role in
the
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society
,
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 but
also
 provide a safe environment for
animals
 that are in danger. At the same time, others are against keeping
animals
 in
zoos
, claiming that it is crucial
captivate
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animals
 apart from their natural habitat and humanity should not interfere
animal’s
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 circle of life. On the one hand, it might be said that
zoos
 have educational value, every visitor is able not only lively observe the animal but
also
 to know about it through the description.
Moreover
, in interactive
zoos
 children and adults are allowed to touch and feed
animals
, which brings people closer to nature. Another benefit of
zoos
 is that it provides safe refuge for endangered species and injured
animals
.
On the other hand
,
zoos
 cannot fully serve the needs of all
animals
. It is almost impossible to duplicate the natural habitat of
animals
, especially for large species,
such
 as the elephant, bears, hippos, rhinos, and others.
In addition
,
maintenance
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zoo
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 can be expensive and not always profitable, and due to lack of funds,
animals
 often suffer from poor service and nutrition.
Moreover
, it is not uncommon in
zoos
, visitors feed
animals
 with inappropriate food, thereby causing harm to
animals
. Overall, it appears that,
although
 maintaining
zoos
 is difficult, it might be beneficial for both human and animal worlds, having educational and protective roles, and if managed properly, it can be
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 viable alternative to a natural environment.
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