Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit the teenagers and the community as well. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

Pupils have plenty of free
time
during the summer holidays when they go to school. Some individuals suggest that teenagers ought to be essential to do
volunteer
community
work
in their leisure
time
.
This
may
useful
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the young people and the society as well while others think that it is not necessary for now. The
first
reason is that
this
situation has lots of
advantage
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on
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their life. After graduating from university, they need a job and when they apply
occupation
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, the
volunteer
jobs they
work
will be beneficial for them as they will have more
advantage
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than other competitors who apply for the job because they have
work
experience.
Therefore
, minor
this
is significant for them. Another reason is that youth is
better
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person. If a person joins a
volunteer
work
, he can develop himself and he is
a
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useful to
community
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the community
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. Everybody
think
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that
this
guy is
reliable
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man. Due to
this
, everyone wants to be there for
this
person, they want to be friends with him and spend
time
with him. Because of
this
, it is essential. To sum,
up
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everything that has been started so far, if teenagers involve themselves in doing free
volunteer
work
, it can be useful for their overall development and growth. According to my, they have to be required to do unpaid community
work
in their free
time
if they want to live more well
prospective
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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