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Even though doctors advise old people to get more exercise, many old people do not get enough.What are the reasons for this?What are some possible solutions for this?

#doctors #people #exercise
Doctors suggest that older
people
 should get more physical activity, lot of them were not able to do. A lot of
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people
 neglect the importance of exercise. In the essay, I will discuss the problems and their possible solutions
of
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 doing exercise. The older you get, the more you lose your physical strength which can lead to many
health
 issues.
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, as a person gets older his appetite reduces and he needs to be
physical
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active
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 to be free from severe
health
 complications. As we can see that the average life expectancy has reduced from the past. Previously
people
 were more athletic and tend to live longer than
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 situation. As per
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 sedentary
lifestyle
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people
 use to sit at one place in front of the computer for 10 hours, which later leads to
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ache
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 or any kind of spinal injuries. In my honest opinion, there should be
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 from
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 young age regarding
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 healthy lifestyle. So that, when they reach
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their older days, knowledge acquired can be used for their
benefits
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.
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, eating habits, exercise on daily basis or just brisk walking etc. As time is not a major constraint, it can be
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on
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 their free time.
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, taking care of
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health
 should be an important priority for an individual. In Conclusion, building endurance has much more advantages for
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 the
longer
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 run. Which can lead to a happy and great life. It should be compulsory for
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people
 to learn about food and nutrition and physical activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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