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In many places, new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. Give your opinion with relevant examples.

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
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There has been a rise in demand for the
contruction
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construction
 of new
homes
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 these days. Some
people
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 think these should not be built in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 so that
this
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area
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 could be protected.
However
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, I am of the opinion that
construction
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 of the
buildinga
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building
buildings
wgis
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wigs
 at
rural
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the rural
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area
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 is required to meet the demand of
increasing
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the increasing
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 population.
This
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 essay shall discuss how
this
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construction
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 can
benefits
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 both
to
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home overpopulation and in
development
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 of rural
areas
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.
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, constructing new
houses
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 in the outskirts can meet the need for the residential
area
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 of
increased
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the increased
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 population of the cities.
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, urban
areas
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 have been already developed with the
construction
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 of big hotels, corporate
office
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offices
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 and
hih
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high
socities
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societies
 residential
buidlings
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buildings
 Due to
this
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,
people
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 from
low income
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group
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groups
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 reside in open
areas
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 resulting in slums which ultimately pollute the environment.
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,
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construction
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the construction
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 of
houses
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 in the
countryside
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 not only home those
people
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 but
also
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 protect the
environemnt
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environment
 to get contaminated.
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,
building
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the building
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of
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new
houses
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 in the
countryside
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 seems more beneficial.
In addition
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 to
this
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, building new
homes
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also
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 leads to
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development
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the development
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 of these backwards
areas
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.
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, more
people
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 tend to move towards villages when they are provided with new residential
areas
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 which ultimately results in the overall progress of
these
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this area
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area
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 with basic
infrastructure
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such
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 as roads,
electricty
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electricity
 and water.
Beside
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 that, a large number of job opportunities will be created by the overall
development
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 of these outskirts.
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, it is clear
these
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this contruction
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contruction
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construction
 can benefit rural
areas
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 more with the
development
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 of basic amenities. To conclude, it is clear how
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construction
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the construction
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 of new
homes
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 in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 benefits by providing
homes
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 to overpopulation along with the overall
development
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 of these
areas
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.
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, it is hoped more
houses
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 will be
contructed
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constructed
 in outskirts in
forseeable
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foreseeable
 future
..
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.
...
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