Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era, most of the young people from rural

areas

are moving to metropolitan

areas

from their native places for schooling or job. As there is a lack of discipline standards and jobs in rural

areas

compared to cities.

Thus

moving to metropolitan

areas

has more benefits than staying in the countryside.

Firstly

, In rural ,

areas

there is a lack of teaching standards when compared to metropolitan

areas

For instance

, in rural

areas

schools or colleges, teachers concentrate on theoretical knowledge, whereas in the cities they concentrate more on practical knowledge which would help students to gain more knowledge.

Also

in countryside schools or colleges we can only select either mother tongue and English as a primary and secondary language, but in ,cities there will be multiple options, we can opt for foreign language as secondary.

Therefore

most of the students are moving to metropolitan

areas

for education.

Secondly

, In the countryside ,job opportunities are very few. Because there are very few companies, even those

also

limited to particular industries mostly related to agriculture.

For example

, I have graduated from my hometown, but I am working in a metropolitan city because none of the companies in my hometown is suitable for my educational qualification and the skill set I have. So I have moved to the city to get better opportunities where I can utilise my education and skills efficiently,

Likewise

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most of the educated people are moving out to metropolitan

areas

This

shows that most of the people who are moving from rural

areas

to metropolitan

areas

are getting benefited with knowledge-wise as well as career-wise.

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Migration
Urbanization
Educational institutions
Job prospects
Wages
Economic growth
Cultural exchange
Overpopulation
Cost of living
Rural depopulation
Social isolation
Traditional values
Personal growth
Recreational activities

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Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries around the world men and women are having children later in life. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Some people think government should spent money on languages that are dying and a few number of people uses them, some think this is a waste of resources. Discuss both views and tell what's your take on this issue.