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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #lives #change
A persons
life
 is as difficult as he thinks it is.
Accordingly
, some
people
 like to live their lives in a set formation and they do not have the desire to
change
 or take
risk
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 in their lives, whereas, some
people
 believe in changing from
time
 to
time
 due to various reasons. I personally believe that a
person
 should be ready to
change
 himself with
time
. In
this
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 we will discuss both kinds of
people
 and try to justify the benefits of
change
. There are
people
 in my
life
 who are completely satisfied with the level of
life
 they have reached and they wish to live in their comfort zone. Though
,
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 there is nothing wrong
in
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 doing what makes you happy, but a
person
 should always be ready to look
the
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 world from a different perspective.
For instance
, I knew a
person
 named Sagar, who owned a restaurant in my town when I was in
my
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secondary school. His
chinese
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 food was considered as the best in that period and every single
person
 in my town loved his food. The only mistake that he
commited
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committed
 is that he got satisfied with all the praise and one fine day when a competitor arrived in the market, Sagar could not compete with him and eventually, he had to shut his eatery. I believe that a
person
 should try to adapt
with
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 changing times,
instead
 of forcing
time
 to remain the same, because
time
 is always ticking and it will not stop for anyone. We have to accept the changes around us and try to survive with
time
.
For instance
, if we look at the famous Bollywood actor
Mr.
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 Amitabh Bacchan. Even though
,
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 there were many well know actors from his generation, but he is the only one who has survived in between today's young generation of
actor
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actors
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 and
people
 still cherish his presence on screen. The only reason behind
this
 acceptance of
people
 is the art of
change
 that he has learnt with
time
 and the way he has revolutionised himself over
the
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time
 to stay with the competition. In conclusion, I will only state one thing that we are temporary
travelers
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 in
this
 world,
thus
 we should always be open to every challenge
life
 throws at us and try to stay with
time
 to attain success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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