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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people are more settled with
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 quo while others believe that change is inevitable.
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 argument followed by my own opinion.
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, performing a task over and over again, aids in building proficiency through development and mastery of a skill. To illustrate
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, some recent stories in the media highlighted
that factory workers
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 who perform
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 task day in day out were more productive compared to their counterparts on
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 basis.
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, the rate of errors committed during
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 of related tasks daily
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 was significantly reduced.
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, remaining at
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 quo does not only build mastery but
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 cuts down the mistakes in
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, there are advantages associated with changing the norm and doing things differently. A shift in routine enhances innovation by allowing individuals to think outside the box. Clearly,
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 is essential in maximizing the potential of different personalities.
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, stretching beyond the
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 quo encourages critical and creative thinking which eventually leads to
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process improvement. A good example is when a dictatorial leader embraces democracy by allowing alternative opinions from other leaders. Precisely, a shift from routine triggers creativity and at the same time helps in
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 of more innovative ideas. In conclusion,I believe that both sides of the argument have merits. Development of proficiency and reduction in error stands in favour
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 quo whereas innovation, critical and creative thinking is enhanced when change is embraced. In my opinion
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however
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, it seems that doing things differently is inevitable especially for the purpose of improvement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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