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Obesity is a ticking time bomb which will cause healthcare cost to explode. To defuse this situation, all fast food advertising should be banned.

#obesity #time #bomb #healthcare #cost #situation #food
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The following bar graph displays the number of
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 per
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 spent doing different types of activities by teenagers in Chester from 2002 to 2007. Overall, teenagers spent the maximum amount of time watching television and minimum going bowling throughout the given period. While the amount of time spent watching television, going to pubs/discos and shopping
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, that spent doing homework, sports, and bowling
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 with, teenagers spent 5-10
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 going to pubs/discos(2002-2003) and 25
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 watching television.
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 value rose to ~17 for the former, and for the latter, it became ~37.
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 trend was seen in
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 of shopping. For
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 activity, the number of
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 began at slightly more than 5 per
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 and ended at 15 per
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 in 2007.
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 trend was observed for activities like doing homework, doing sports, and bowling. For homework and sports, the values started at 17 and 10
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 per
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 respectively and
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 decreased steadily to become slightly more than 5 and 0 respectively in 2007. The number of
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 spent every
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 watching DVDs was the same in 2002 and 2007,
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 it rose up slightly in the middle years.
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