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Many countries spend a lot of money on improved transport for urban areas while neglecting rural transport. What are the problems associated with this? What are some possible solutions?

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for
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 each country,
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always has a drastic advance or a substantial development;
therefore
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,
transports
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transport
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 public are likely more relatively
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 than
other
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in other
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 cities,
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it
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which
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 absolutely negatively
affect
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affects
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to
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people
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 in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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 or others.
This
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 essay will demonstrate both problems and some ways to solve them. To start with, as everyone
knew
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, an urban always has more
tourism
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tourist
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 attractions,
that
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and
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 they make a lot of tourists
travel
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, so the
government
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 is unavoidable to enhance
transports
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transport
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such
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 as buses,
train
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trains
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 and others.
Also
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,
people
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 or tourists want to go to a
city
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 to
travel
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 or work because
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 has modernisation and technological
advance
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advances
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.
Additionally
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, the
government
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 might think that the urban
city
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 is
the
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a
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 place for combining many
people
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 to work or
travel
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. These are the main issue which the
government
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 accepts
these
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and only improve urban.
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, there are many ways
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will solve these problems.
Firstly
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, the
government
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 should build or change something
such
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 as tourism attractions or
the
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apply
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malls to
similar
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be similar
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with
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to
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 the
city
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 in order
to
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for to
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people
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can
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decide to
travel
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 in their
city
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.
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, the
government
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 have some sufficient reasons to improve its
transports
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transport
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 to the countryside.
In addition
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, the state should build pathways to link provinces, and it is useful for
people
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 who need to work in the
city
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,
will
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and will
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 not use their own car
that it
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which
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 can help global warming to better.
To conclude
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,
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according to
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this
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 essay,
it
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will just suggest
to
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this
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 way to improve transport because not only
this
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 is necessary for everyone but
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 some tourist attractions are more
worth
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worthwhile
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.

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task response
Provide a clear introduction that addresses the topic and introduces the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of ideas and use cohesive devices to better connect and sequence the information throughout the essay.
lexical resource
Utilize a wider range of vocabulary and demonstrate a better grasp of collocations and idiomatic expressions related to the topic.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure, verb tense consistency, and overall grammatical accuracy.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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