Many countries spend a lot of money on improved transport for urban areas while neglecting rural transport. What are the problems associated with this? What are some possible solutions?
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The
for
each country, Change preposition
of
it
always has a drastic advance or a substantial development; Correct pronoun usage
apply
therefore
, transports
public are likely more relatively Correct subject-verb agreement
transport
improvement
than Replace the word
improved
other
cities, Change preposition
in other
that
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apply
it
absolutely negatively Correct pronoun usage
which
affect
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affects
to
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apply
people
in Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
or others. Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
This
essay will demonstrate both problems and some ways to solve them.
To start with, as everyone knew
, an urban always has more Wrong verb form
knows
tourism
attractions, Replace the word
tourist
that
they make a lot of tourists Correct word choice
and
travel
, so the government
is unavoidable to enhance transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
such
as buses, train
and others. Fix the agreement mistake
trains
Also
, people
or tourists want to go to a city
to travel
or work because this
has modernisation and technological advance
. Fix the agreement mistake
advances
Additionally
, the government
might think that the urban city
is the
place for combining many Correct article usage
a
people
to work or travel
. These are the main issue which the government
accepts these
and only improve urban.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, there are many ways which
will solve these problems. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Firstly
, the government
should build or change something such
as tourism attractions or the
malls to Correct article usage
apply
similar
Add a missing verb
be similar
with
the Change preposition
to
city
in order to
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for to
people
can
decide to Verb problem
apply
travel
in their city
. Moreover
, the government
have some sufficient reasons to improve its transports
to the countryside. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
In addition
, the state should build pathways to link provinces, and it is useful for people
who need to work in the city
, will
not use their own car Correct word choice
and will
that it
can help global warming to better.
Correct pronoun usage
which
To conclude
, according to
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apply
this
essay, it
will just suggest Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
Change preposition
apply
this
way to improve transport because not only this
is necessary for everyone but also
some tourist attractions are more worth
.Replace the word
worthwhile
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