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social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.

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The table gives some data about 4 indicators for 4 countries in 1994, in accordance with United Nations pointers. Overall, the indicators illustrate some categories
such
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 as annual income per
person
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,life expectancy at birth, daily calorie supply per
person
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, adult literacy
rate
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. With regards to yearly income and life expectancy at birth, the high
rate
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 of yearly income every
person
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 belonged to
Japan
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 with 15760, in ,contrast the least number happened in Zaire with 130.
On the other hand
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, the indexes of life expectancy at birth were relatively similar in
Canada
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 and
Japan
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, but the high
rate
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 occurred in
Japan
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 with 78.
In addition
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, the same situation was shown in Peru and Zaire with 51 and 47 respectively. In terms of
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day
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 by
day
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 weight supply each
person
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 and adult literacy percentage. The statistics of
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 outnumbered
than
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the others about
day
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 by
day
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 weight supply each
person
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. On top of ,that the high level belonged to
Canada
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 with 3326. The pointers of
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 were same each other with
ninety nine
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 in every one hundred about literacy
rate
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.
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, the show of Peru outnumbered twice as much
than
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 the number of Zaire
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