Q- People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the time fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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that it is more important to plant
trees
in open areas of town and cities , while
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believes that we should build more buildings. I
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agree with the former statement, and in
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I will support my view with examples. One of the most significant benefits of
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is fresh air.For
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, in the city where I live, we only have some parts with fewer
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and more surrounded by concrete buildings. Due to
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we do not get a sufficient amount of fresh air to breathe and it may affect our health. To solve
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issue we should increase plantation, in order to have a safe and secure environment.
As a result
, families in cities can live healthy
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life
and breathe safer and clear air. Nowadays, housing construction has increased but tree plantation has deceased. Because of
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crowd tend to visit areas where they can enjoy the sceneries and have less stress to enjoy their holidays. The Uk studies claimed that tress can reduce human stress by 60%. Personally, one can have their own garden inside their house, so that it may help them to calm their mind and at the same time they can enjoy gardening. In conclusion,
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we need to build more housing, it's important to consider human health and for ,that we need to plant more
trees
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