Some think that governments should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to eat healthier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
One of the most controversial issues today is that some
people
argue that junk food
should be taxed by the government
as this
decision can make people
have more healthy food
in their daily consumption. In this
essay, I am going to examine this
topic from both points of view, and agree with the first idea.
On the one hand, there is a clear argument that unhealthy food
is usually refined carbohydrates and contains a lot
of additives such
as salt or fatty sweet sauces which make this
food
mouth-watering and well-smelling. One of the main reasons can be that the company which produces this
food
wants the purchasers to order more, as the latter cannot get enough with its taste. This
means that customers who have fine portions of such
food
on their daily menu gain a lot
of fat and if they do not usually lose a lot
of energy, they can become obese. For instance
, the last
Forbes research about the lifestyle of the average office manager who does not have a lot
of time for fine and healthy lunch preparation, but has a happy meal from McDonald's at its place, suffers from obesity.
On the other hand
, I agree with the viewpoint that the government
should put some restrictions and fees for junk food
to reduce its purchasing by customers to make them think about their health. Thus
, I hope that the government
should make companies such
as Burger King or Papa Jones write some notes on the food
wrapping that such
products can lead to obesity and apathy if some individual eats it every day. Also
, there should be more advertisements on TV and radio about nutritious food
and healthy diet. For instance
, "The Healthy Society" TV show always has a speech about how fresh vegetables and fruits boost our health, what oils should be used as an additive and how attractive and packed with vitamins a well-balanced diet is. As a result
, more people
become healthy and cheered up as some of them were suffering from being overweight, but now feeling true relief.
In conclusion, the government
should pay more attention to its citizens' eating habits. It seems to me that people
should use less unhealthy products, but follow the technique of how they can improve their daily menu to make it healthier.Submitted by zakhra.aliyeva2001 on
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