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It is believed that people who read for pleasure develop their imagination more and acquire better language skills compared to people who prefer watching television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable that reading books in leisure can help to ingrain imagination and proficiency in a language; watching
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 is a passive activity
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. I partially support the statement as
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 has its own significance in learning speaking skills. The following paragraphs will highlight my opinion with relevant examples. The first and foremost reason is that literature reading enhances the creativity and imagination energy as
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 can
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 creating the pictures of the characters of a story and building the reading scenes in an imaginary way in
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 dreams.
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 phenomenon
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 a regular
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 would make the person live more in his own thoughts.
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, imbibe publishing aids to absorb new words and phrases of a language that could polish language skills later.
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, viewing movies and commercials on the screen could make a person familiar with the accent
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 can get fluency in
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speaking
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 it is not practicable in reading.
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, watching and listening together on a screen
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 it feasible to pronounce words accurately
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 the movement of lips is important in speaking. Apart from that, watching the screen can
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pour
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 some pleasure as
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 can enjoy the scenic beauty of the place.
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, by viewing English Channel documentaries,
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 can access remote areas, which
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 arduous to reach
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in some cases.
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, I pen down saying that both means have their own impact on an individual. Reading novels and journals may increase the imaginary power, whilst watching television helps to learn the accent
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 the scenic view.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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