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Some people feel that government should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and school. Other feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Public
services
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 play an indispensable role in the development process of a
country
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. Some
people
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 believe that the
government
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 should impose larger taxes on salaries in order to pay for public
services
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, while others think it is not a good decision. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and explain why it is necessary that citizens should pay a higher
income
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tax
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 to the state.
To begin
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 with, Some
people
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 argue that the
government
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 should not charge higher tariffs on their salaries. Since some developing
countries
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 are dealing with an economic crisis, most
people
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 cannot manage the expenses with their
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income
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hence
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 charging taxes are unreasonable.
For instance
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, the average monthly wage of workers in some
countries
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 is much lower while the living cost is higher which they cannot cover
this
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 cost with the salary. If the
government
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further
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 deducts
money
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 from these salaries, it leads to many economy-related problems.
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 it is incontrovertible that improving public
services
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 help the citizen, imposing a larger
tax
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 would impact
people
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 who are struggling to manage their expenses.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 including myself believe it is beneficial to impose large tariffs in order to improve the infrastructure and other
services
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. It is intuitively obvious that the primary
income
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 of most
countries
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 is taxation so that
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money
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 provides greater support to improve education, health and other
services
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.
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, some
countries
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 charge more than 35% of the monthly salary as an
income
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tax
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 and the public
services
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 are well developed in these
countries
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 so that every citizen get benefits out of it. It elucidates the point that higher tariffs would help to improve necessary
services
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 and it accelerates the development process of the
country
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. In summary, It is irrefutable that, in order to develop a
country
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, improving public
services
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 are more important. In
this
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 essay, I discuss why some
people
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 do not agree to deduct
tax
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 while others including my self think it is compulsory the governments should earn
money
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 over the
people
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's salary. I believe, since public
services
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 are beneficial for every individual in the
country
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, it is reasonable that the
government
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 charge
money
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 from the individuals who earn.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of salaries
  • necessary public services
  • infrastructure
  • redistribute wealth
  • wealth gap
  • equitable
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • tax evasion
  • tax avoidance
  • tax revenue
  • burdensome
  • human capital
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