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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requriement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

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Humans are inevitably resistant to changes in their ways of life. Some
people
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 acknowledge that the required amount of waste is not being recycled and
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, it is essential for the
government
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 to take the charge of
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 and to devise laws for exercising recycling.
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, in my opinion, the
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 must take action in order to encourage recycling since
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people
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 do not process it on their own to a needed level.
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, a large chunk of recyclable materials is extracted from households, making them a huge contributor.To illustrate, Japanese homes recycle 90% of their aluminium materials,which was 55%, after the introduction of tax redeeming law on recyclable products. It is because of the increased pollution in the environment and productive pressure on industries, it is imperative for governments to take the issue into their hands. Since
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 we have seen in the past that
people
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 tend not to take many viable opinions seriously unless those opinions are forged into laws.
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, not only the
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 but
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 private sectors can
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 come into a role in helping governments to segregate recyclable products.
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, one of the vending machines in Germany provides a discount of 2%, if customers recycle their previous used canned bottles into the vending machine. In my view, the
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 all by itself cannot achieve the result without the help of the private sector.
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, it is a paramount job for
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 to reduced carbon footprints ,
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people
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 cannot achieve
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 target on their own without the intervention of governments. To conclude, it is lucrative for
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 to intervene in
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 situation, where it can have the leverage of collecting taxes when a certain quantity of recyclable material is not achieved and simultaneously
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 will help humanity in reducing pollutants into the environment and will encourage the judicial use of our resources.

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