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In the future, we will have more and more leisure tile as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and at work. Discuss the challenges amd benefits this will bring

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modern life individuals have less leisure because of their hectic
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. No doubt, we will have more free
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 because
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 advancement of technology all the man
work
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 is done by the different
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 of
machines
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. In these days,
people
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 can
compelete
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complete
 their
work
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 at a very fast rate because of telecommunication. Due to
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, some
humanbeings
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human beings
 face provocation and some get benefit from
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. Let us discuss briefly. To embark upon, unfurling some challenges that
indviduals
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individuals
 face because of the use of
machines
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.
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 and foremost, in many industries all the heavy
work
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 is done by
machines
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 and the requirement of mankind are reduced. By
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, many
people
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 can not able to find another job.
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, the unemployment of the nation could be inclined. According to the survey conducted by
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university
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 25% of employees lost their job because of technology.
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, companies can not give more preference to their skilled worker
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,there are some benefits of using
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.
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, in many industries
worker
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workers
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 have to do lots of
work
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 in minimum
time
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 but with the help of
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machines
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 they can complete
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the task
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task
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tasks
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 and
fulfill
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 customer
requirement
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requirements
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 within the
time
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 limit.
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,
people
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 have more
time
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 because it is not required to do
work
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 all the
time
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 since
machines
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 can do
everthing
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everything
.
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 ,
people
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 can focus on other household
work
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 and physical activities.
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 they can spend more
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 with their families and
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 focus on their
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.
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 it can be seen that 30% of
people
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 can help with their families in their
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personal
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.
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 conclusion,
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 there are some challenges that individuals face because job opportunities are reduced
becusse
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because
 of
machines
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 but
people
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 can complete
lot
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 of
work
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becuase
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because
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sometimes
worker
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workers
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are
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 not
sufficent
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sufficient
 to do all the
work
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 in
time
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 but technology can do it easily

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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