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It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It is commonly witnessed that in some countries there will be a higher amount of old
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 compared to younger
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. Both the merits and demerits of
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 and foremost merit of
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 amount of older
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 will be seen in the near future as old
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 are considered as the
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valuable
 citizens of the
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. The
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, opinions given by them give tremendous benefits to
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society
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. It is widely seen that their opinions are more sound and practical.
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 more experience due to which they provide valuable guidance to others. The guidance provided by them is
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 for the
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. Another clear merit is,
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 imbibe by
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 number of
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the old
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 of
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 have resulted to protect the culture of the country. The old generation
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 are cognizant and have
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of
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 culture and
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.
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,
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 can be incorporated from them and can be applied practically in one's life. They provide a direction to the
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. According to
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research conducted by an eminent Sociologist, Henry cook at Harvard University,
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was revealed that
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 proportion of older
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 have
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 ability to protect the culture and
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 of the country.
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,
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 group of older
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 have some disadvantages like according to modernised time, older
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 are unfamiliar with the tasks that a younger individual has to do for their livelihood. They lack
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deep knowledge of today's jobs and practicality.
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, old
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 are not sturdy to work physically that younger generations can do. They are deprived of enthusiasm, energy level and work level and if there will be
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 amount of them, the economic comprehensive growth will hamper. The economy will not be financially viable too. To conclude,
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 of
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 have positive effects on
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society
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 as well as
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, the drawbacks of task management and economic growth need to be considered.
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