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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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Moving away from rural areas towards urban zones is becoming
incresibly
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incredibly
increasingly
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normal
 in many countries. A huge number of
people
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 are choosing big
metropolies
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metropolises
metropolis
 to live in order to improve their
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 quality.
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people
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is
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 moving to cities and how
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 can affect
citie´s
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city's
cities
 public services.
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 with, most rural
people
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 choose
moving
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to move
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 away because they seek a better life standard that cannot be
achived
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achieved
 where they live. The main cause is that in urban zones, the amount of hospitals or
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health
-care attention
centers
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 is much more than in the countryside.
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, the quality is better because of the fact that it is easier to get
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medical
suplies
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supplies
.
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, normally if someone has an accident in a
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, an ambulance normally would need around 15 to 20 minutes in order to arrive at the place while in the rural areas the delay can be up to more than one hour.
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, the probability
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 getting faster health care is higher in the cities than in the
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countryside
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country side
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countryside
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. Something
that is
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importat
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important
 to consider is that an
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overcrowded
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overcrowed
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overcrowded
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city
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 can create serious problems for the residents as a
concecuense
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consequence
 that some of their public services may collapse . All cities are prepared to hold a certain amount of
people
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, when those numbers are
surprased
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surprised
 delays
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 the transportation
sistem
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system
 or in the medical
centers
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centres
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 start
apearing
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appearing
. For
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instance
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, the subway
sistem
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system
 from the
city
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 where I live, Buenos Aires, can transport 150 persons between stations every 10 minutes. When I started using it two years ago, I always got in the
first
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 car that arrived,
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 nowadays
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 normal that I have to wait
some time
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 until I´m able to get in. In conclusion,
people
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 always try to seek
for
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apply
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a better quality of life,
as a
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result
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people
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 are choosing to live in a
city
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instead
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 of the
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countryside
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country side
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countryside
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.
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than
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it
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should be
controled
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controlled
,
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for, otherwise
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otherwise
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,otherwise
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 some places can start having problems in their public
sistem
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system
.
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