Some pepole say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and becom disciplined. Others argue that teenagers should not sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work . Discusee both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, there are adolescents who occupied part-time jobs, that they attend after school. While there are groups who agree with
this
logic,
on the other hand
, there is actually another group that doesn't agree at all. In my view, It depends on the student himself and how he is acting under pressure. In
this
,fo essay I will show the advantages and disadvantages of
this
matter. As a
teenager
that he lives in his parents' house and having everything without effort,a part-time job will give him the opportunity of taking the responsibility for himself. In ,addition to earn some money, the
teenager
will be provided with socially and financially experiences.
Consequently
, it has a good reflection on his management skills and management of time. On the flip side, there are disadvantages of being an employee when you are a student,
such
as the distraction from being fully busy with the job. Oppositely ,a
teenager
who doesn't work has no distraction so that can help him/her focusing on school and just have one goal in mind.
Therefore
, he will get unsatisfying grades. In conclusion , there is no guarantee which choice is a good one , It depends on the adolescent himself . As adolescence is a hard time for both the parents and the
teenager
,
therefore
, the parents should have an open dialogue with their son or daughter and illustrate how could the consequences of one choice change the
teenager
's life , and help them to make their choices.
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