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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
People have different views about that universities should accept
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numbers
 of male and female
students
 in every major. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
 view. In my opinion, it would be wrong to offer
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 of placements for both male and female
students
. Universities might find that it would not be practical to enrol
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 of male and female young people in various majors.
For example
, way more girls tend to choose to receive higher
education
 in the fields of
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linguistic
linguistics
 or arts than boys. At the same time, boys are more likely to study majors related to engineering or science. Genders should not be a barrier for
students
 who would pursue higher
education
. When higher
education
 institutes evaluate potential
candidates
, it should be depending on their qualifications or skills
instead
 of genders.
For example
, both male and female
candidates
 compete for an available placement in a subject. If there is no more available placement for female
candidates
, it would not be equal to admit less competitive male
candidates
.
This
 would result in a situation that well-qualified and well-educated
students
 might not be able to
further
 their
education
. It would have
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 impact on our nation in future. In conclusion, in my opinion, it is not beneficial for our
education
 and nation that universities accept
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numbers
 of males and females
candidates
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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