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A close relative of yours is having a birthday lunch next week, but you know you will be working Write a letter to you boss or supervisor to ask for some time off . In your letter, -explain the situation and why you particularly want to attend the lunch -specify the dates , times and amount of time off you will need -offer to work late or come in early another time to make up for the time

Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well and in the best spirits. I am writing
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 letter to get your permission to take some time off from work to attend a lunch party next week. One of my cousins, who lives in Toronto, invited me to be a part of his birthday celebration. Even, he invited all relatives, and my college friends to
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 party. And especially told me to come at least. I think it would be a great chance to get together
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 I live far from them. The birthday party will be going to held on the 30th of August at Canoe Restaurant around 4 o'clock in the evening. I only need an hour off from work. Usually, I leave the office at 7 o'clock, so I will be at the office nearby 5:15pm. I will try to finish my projects on time
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 I will delegate my tasks to my project partner
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, who will give you the rest of the updates on the projects that we are going to deal with the Auto company for the very next day. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam.

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grammar
Be clear on why you want to go and how long you will be away. Put this in the first lines.
structure
Put the date and time in a clear form. Say the exact start and end time.
coherence
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Do not add many extra details.
punctuation
Use full stops well. Join ideas with 'and' or start a new line for a new idea.
tone
Polite and formal tone.
content
Shows you will make up work by the plan to finish or delegate.
detail
Gives the date and place for the event.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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