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Nowadays mare tasks at home and work are being performed by robots. Is this a negative or positive development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Technological progress has committed significant leap since the middle of the twentieth century. Manual labour was gradually replaced by
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 in production at factories and plants. Progress
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 penetrated into people’s homes, filling
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 with devices make our daily life easier but
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 development has both negative and positive sides. Automation of many processes in production leads to a reduction in the cost of the goods, due to the improvement of the quality and quantity of products, but at the same ,time the amount of jobs is decreased. No one, even the most experienced worker, can replace a robot
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 is able to work twenty-four hours a day seven days a week and does not require a salary. Every year manual labour becomes less in demand, which leads to an increase in the number of unemployed.
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 play an important role in most household chores. They help us cook, wash the dishes or clean the house. A person freed from domestic duties can devote more time to his family and loved ones or to sports, creativity or education. But there are
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 disadvantages here. The cost of
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 is quite high, while they are not so perfect and do not always perform their functions correctly. Summing up the above, we can conclude that the progress and development of technology is an inevitable process that cannot be stopped. It makes our life more convenient and easier, but it will
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 lead to the fact that many professions in the near future may simply disappear,
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 it is obvious that professions related to the repair and maintenance of
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 will be in demand for a very long time.
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