Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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The bad circumstance of biodiversity has become a widespread concern
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recent years. There is an opinion that
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governments should spend a huge amount of money on preserving wild
animals
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, I disagree with the idea given, because it is possible to exploit resources intelligently to benefit both
animals
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and
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population. The animal conservation project has been highly prioritized in many countries. The
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convincing reason is the
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appear
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in
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list increase every year. If the extinction of flora and fauna continues, the survival of
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can be threatened. For
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example, if the hunt of
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cannot be prevented, the ocean ecosystems will be changed in a negative trend,
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may affect the seafood sources on which the communities, especially the fishermen depend for a living.
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, protecting wild
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means protecting
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habitats of
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like rainforests and
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the ocean
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. If not, climate change will alter our food supplied when
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overpopulation still
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, there will be a shortage of food unless they solve
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problem as soon as possible.
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, money should be spent on
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of humankind, certainly.
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of all,
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the poverty
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and homelessness
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rates
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in many undeveloped and developing countries
increase
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dramatically. Let alone many lives are in difficult circumstances and now facing death because of
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starvation and disease. For that reason, the authorities should aid the funds for the underprivileged to overcome
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adversity and improve the lives of residents.
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, wild
animals
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may be
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maybe
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the most compelling reason
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the decrease
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agriculture. They eat crops or
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leave
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pathogens on plants, which reduce the quantity and efficiency of agricultural products.
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but not least, people establish ecotourism destinations in order to prevent endangered species from poaching, but its purpose
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only that. The responsibility of
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is creating more jobs for the people
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as biotechnology or environment protection industry. In conclusion, it is necessary to protect wild
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, people should keep
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the resources allocated for society and wildlife
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem stability
  • pollination
  • water purification
  • climate regulation
  • eco-tourism
  • scientific research
  • moral and ethical responsibility
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • financial cost
  • social issues
  • healthcare
  • education
  • fund allocation
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