Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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times. While these
school
students
encounter the problem of physical harassment that happens in many
schools
these days, these issues should be addressed by the
management
of that particular institution. In
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I will examine the possible causes and will suggest
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resolution
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for
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. To embark upon, the problems caused by bullying the
students
at
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of
schools
can be addressed by two causatives
such
as lethargic
school
management
and psychologically affected
student
.
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lack of efficient
administration
by the
school
might result in
students
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with
thier
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their
peers.
That is
to say, the
school
creates the opportunity to tease the other folks inside the campus.
Besides
,some children's might be affected psychologically by the environment encountered at their homes,
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may lead to trouble
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friends at the institution where they study.
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, If the parents were quarrelling at home, that boy would be affected mentally by the negative environment that happened in his life.
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spirit himself.
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could be identified by examing the
student
, who indulged in
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at
school
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campus. There are two possible solutions for the above reasons of teasing, one is improving the educational institution in the way of efficient
management
and the other is the specific
student
must be counselled by the educational psychologist.
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to say,
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educational
management
must be improved in aspects of both
administration
and monitoring
students
efficiently inside the circumstances.
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inside the compound should take the responsibility of
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counselling
and identifying the children who
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actually
with
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misbehaving or troubling other folks.
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,One of my friend's
daughter
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was counselled at her
school
when she
was keep
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on teasing her peers inside the classroom.Eventually,she was found relatively good after a period of
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a month
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month
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.
Thus
,the bullying can be solved by these couple of ideas. In conclusion, Though bullying might be common in many other
schools
, due to
administration
of
school
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and home disputes,
this
is likely rectified by the counselling of the
student
and the change in
school
administration
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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