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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays，the environmental problems caused by the excessive use of fossil
energy
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 like
petrol
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 have become more and more serious, but in my opinion, only raising the price of
petrol
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 can not solve the main problem of environmental pollution. It is true that increasing the price of
petrol
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 could make fewer
people
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 afford it, and as fewer
people
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 can afford
petrol
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, fewer
people
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 will use cars as the main
transportation
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, and if fewer
people
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 drive cars, the exhaust emissions will decrease. But it is not fair to
people
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 who live in suburbs or areas with poor public transport, those who can not afford
petrol
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 will undertake much extra pressure. I think that the government should give priority to developing and building public transport and reduce their ticket costs within reasonable limits. If using public
transportation
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 can lead
people
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 to get to place as fast and convenient as they drive a private car, I think more and more
people
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 will choose to take public
transportation
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. When most
people
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 take public
transportation
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, there will be significant reductions in
petrol
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 consumption and exhaust emissions, the pollution of environments and global warming will be relieved.
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, the government should think about the development of new clean
energy
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, with the development of modern science and technology, it becomes more and more common for cars or some other
transportation
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 to run on clean
energy
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. if the society can more focus on developing new
energy
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 sources will
also
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 reduce public use
petrol
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. In conclusion, I think increasing the price is not very useful to mitigate the pollution problem, the better way to increase using of clean and renewable
energy
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 sources.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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