Some people think that in the modern society becoming more dependent on each other, while others say that individuals are becoming more independent. Discuss both views and give Your own opinion?

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There are many concerned individuals who feel that the advanced community can not survive without each other's support, while others believe that society is becoming more self-sufficient. I completely agree with the latter statement, and in

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sides of the topic. On one hand, due to

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modern technology, humans are relying on mobile applications in

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daily routine. If we need to learn

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instead

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a teacher, we may prefer to use

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platforms. To exemplify it, while preparing for the IELTS exam, I used online classes to increase my speaking knowledge. We have

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that, kids enjoy playing video games rather than playing outdoor sports.

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can be seen in

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generation. For entertainment

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, they tend to use social media. If we want to make any bank transactions, we are no longer turning to banks, as we can do online transactions without

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were developed by human begins.

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we could not use any

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, we can cook our food but because we become habitual of using these platforms, we liked to place an order. When we go through any obstacles, for technical support we can take

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of science but for emotional support we need people.

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the delivery for us. In conclusion,

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we may not need society to complete our daily chores

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directly and indirectly we can not live a peaceful life without their intervention.

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Topic Vocabulary:

interdependence
globalized economy
collaborative work environments
crowd-sourced
empowered
perception
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Some people think that in the modern society becoming more dependent on each other, while others say that individuals are becoming more independent. Discuss both views and give Your own opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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Young people are highly influenced by famous people and they look up to them as role models. Is that a positive or negative development?

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