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Govenments should spend more money on railways than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#govenments #money #railways #roads
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From the medieval ages, improvement in travelling is a part of
human’
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human
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 evolution. In the current era,
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government
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the government
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 of the states spends money
for
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on
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 the
development
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 of infrastructures
such
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 as
railways
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 and
roads
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. It is a debate on the notion that whether
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government
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the government
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 should spend money on
railways
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 in comparison to that spend on
roads
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.
To begin
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government
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the government
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 must measure the requirement of the community.
Cities
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, where most
of
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travellers
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the travellers
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 use
railways
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 as their prime medium of commuting, require the investment of
government
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 resources to the region.
Inter city
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Intercity
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 railway
such
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 as underground railway network is the heart of the connectivity to the different parts of the city. To illustrate,
New
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the New
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 York metro station is one the largest network of
underground
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the underground
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 railway
station
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stations
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 that serves over 3 million commuters in the city.
Railways
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 have leverage over
roads
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 because there is a minuscule chance to get stuck in
a
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traffic since
,
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 the administration of
railways
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 is controlled by the
government
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.
On the other hand
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, it is my view that
roads
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also
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 play a paramount role
to
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 the
development
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 of the state.
This
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 is because
roads
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 are
fundamental
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the fundamental
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 medium of travelling.
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, it would be detrimental for a
government
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 to neglect the
development
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 of roadways. Right from the start of a
city’
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city's
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development
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roads
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play
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 an imperative role
promoting
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in promoting
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 trades among the
cities
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. Some of the commuters prefer to travel by their private vehicles rather than to travel in a public space.
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, after the advent of
pandemic
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 most
of
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the
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people are now preferring to travel by their own means.
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, it is evident that
government
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 cannot completely rely on the public transportation services
such
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 as
railways
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. To conclude, without sitting on the fence, in my view the sources spent by the
government
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 depends on the kind of state or
cities
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 it is governing. Since
,
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 most of the
cities
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 are quite decently developed, and
pandemic
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 will not
last
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 for a long period of time. For the sake of
greater
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 good in
this
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situation
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 it is advisable to spend
money
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more money
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 on the
railways
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 than that spend on
roads
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.
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