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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Life
 is full of changes. While some choose to do the same kind of things in their routine devoiding changes in
life
, others prefer to adopt
difference
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 in
life
,as they feel relatively good.In
this
 essay,I will discuss both the statements and, opine my ideas. To embark upon,some
people
 always delighted to option the accustomed activities in their
day-today
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life
.
In other words
,
people
 find themselves satisfied with what they have at
present
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 situation and,happy with it.
Besides
 their satisfaction with their usual activities,they
also
 tend to proceed their
further
life
 with it.
That is
 to say,they would like to carry over the habituated things in their future
life
 and,not dare to encounter anything new.
For example
,One of my friends,Mr.Prakash
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has
contempted
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contemplated
contempt
contented
 with what he has ,and, never has changed his
carreer
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career
 and the company for the past 15 years of his
life
.
On the other hand
,some others in
this
 society prefer to often
switch-over
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 and, explore new events in their lives regardless of their comfort level.These
people
,intended to do any sort of jobs or
life-events
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life events
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 with
new
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 look and environment.
Instead
 of
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 their
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convenience
confidence
convience
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 these
people
 wander to experience fresh circumstances in their
life
.
For instance
,One of the research
article
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 from science direct has exposed that certain sort of
people
 with unique mentally has always look for changes to
fullfill
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fulfil
 their
acheivement
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achievement
. To conclude,though certain
people
 are habituated
in
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 doing
the
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things with no differences,I would prefer supporting the
people
,who are keen
in
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 doing varieties in their daily performance,due to the fact that they would experience new
life
 and lifestyle due to the challenging environment.
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